So "'Wait For Me.'
Give a man his I said to her, manliness--
provide what you want I creature comfort want only for him
and herself--
more so.
You preserve essential think marriage
is hypocrisies-- everything?
In short, make a oh well, home for herself.
I said."
I didn't get the rhythms right but if you do it you--
should come out together at the end.
Not so easy.
And one last of this section--
These first poems are all from the first part
of the book, which is--
and here again we were talking about this a little earlier
in the evening.
I wanted to see--
because again, Olson had made me sensitive to what
the line could register as a possibility.
If one thought of it-- as he put it,
he used, I feel that the sense of breath which he speaks of
has primarily let's say a metaphoric sense.
By which I mean, I don't think he actually wanted people
to time their breathing with a metronome
or something of that-- or to become
so self-conscious about their breathing
that they simply panted through poems.
But I think what he was actually pointing
to was the fact that after the breath is issue of or is
in relation to what emotions are felt.
So anyhow, my translation of what he was thinking of
is simply that the line can act as a qualification
rhythmically-- as a rhythmic unit-- can
act as a qualification of how the feeling is coming.
Or what you are feeling about what you're saying.
How you are feeling what you're saying.
So then a poem of this kind, the line is used--
and already by this point, it's become
almost a sophistication-- the line is
used to make an emphasis upon the statement in such a way
that the feelings that the statement is concerned
with become emphasized.
So I'll read it, and perhaps it'll become clear.